Re-edited Intro

After getting feedback from the rough cut by our target audience and our wider audience, I have made some changes on the sequence based on the feedback, which I think is appropriate. I have done an analysis on the intro of the sequence from the rough cut based on the feedback and why I have done the changes.

Here is the re edited version of the intro

Here is my analysis of the introductions of both versions

here are screenshots of when I was editing on FinalCut